Everyone has different opinions of humanity, here are some of mine. Humans are just like animals, we all got feelings: happy or sad, proud or depressed. But humanity means we are a being, not an animal that’s living in a cage or forest, we are our own organisms that are living in this world. Being a human is good and bad; human has good qualities but also bad too. For examples: we will never get enough of materials, it’s hard for human to be thankful, we always want more than what we already have, that’s a bad quality we got that maybe some animals don’t.There is a Cree quote that says "only when the last tree has been cut down, the last fish caught, and the last river poisoned will we realize we can't eat money." unfortunately, it seems like some people will never get enough of what they want.But on the good side, we can be thankful and to be appreciating what others are doing and giving us, we might want more and more, but at the same time we are thankful of what we have, that’s what maybe animals or plants can’t feel. Also humans can be helpful to each other’s; we give what we have to others to help their life to become better, like we gave Japan money and food to help them thought the earthquake. But at the same time, we can get jealous of others; those who are more wealthy, more beautiful, more powerful people than us, we will start getting jealous. Just overall, being a human has both good and bad side, our job is to take away the bad qualities and increase the amount of good qualities.
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Everyone has different opinions of humanity, here are some of mine. Humans are just like animals, we all got feelings: happy or sad, proud or depressed. But humanity means we are a being, not an animal that’s living in a cage or forest, we are our own organisms that are living in this world. Being a human is good and bad; human has good qualities but also bad too. For examples: we will never get enough of materials, it’s hard for human to be thankful, we always want more than what we already have, that’s a bad quality we got that maybe some animals don’t. There is a Cree quote that says "only when the last tree has been cut down, the last fish caught, and the last river poisoned will we realize we can't eat money." unfortunately, it seems like some people will never get enough of what they want. But on the good side, we can be thankful and to be appreciating what others are doing and giving us, we might want more and more, but at the same time we are thankful of what we have, that’s what maybe animals or plants can’t feel. Also humans can be helpful to each other’s; we give what we have to others to help their life to become better, like we gave Japan money and food to help them thought the earthquake. But at the same time, we can get jealous of others; those who are more wealthy, more beautiful, more powerful people than us, we will start getting jealous. Just overall, being a human has both good and bad side, our job is to take away the bad qualities and increase the amount of good qualities.